Response to Comment

        Well, I just revised my "In Defense of..." post with tips from Dr. D's comment.  She typed: "Wendy, you have a really developed post with a lot of good reasons. I want you to think about where you could strengthen by simplifying. For instance, how would this post be changed if you began with "Without music, life would be boring: no background music in movies, TV, or commercials, no songs at all, and none of your favorite singers would even be doing what they are doing." While it is good to know your thinking about choosing a topic, putting that at the beginning prevents you from having a strong, striking opening."  I took that into consideration and changed my opening to a question... "What would life be like without music?"  I mean really, what would it be like?  Can you imagine?  Anyways...  I simplified some of the rambling I did in the blog and shortened it and added some more specifics to make it a little better. 
        By changing the opening, I think I let it be a little more readers' thought based rather than think about if this happened and this happened and all these specifics on how life would be different.  It lets the reader think on it for a second or two before reading my reasons as to how it would be different and how I feel it is important in my life.  I know I don't really do the whole "simplifying" thing and ramble or add unimportant things, and I'm trying to get out of that habit.  I also know I'm not that great of a writer, so I hope this makes sense as to why I revised and how it changed the post.